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Thursday, January 31, 2008

V (2)

Since the terrorist of 9-11 ran the planes into the Twin Towers, Pentagon, and attempted to run one into the White House, the line between our safety and our freedom has thinned out a lot. As citizens we have all these rights that the government gives us. Also we still want to be safe. In all actuality, we, as citizens mess these things up. We take advantage of our rights sometimes or other people can mess them up as well, such as the terrorists.

A guy with a mask on shows this in a movie, V for Vendetta. His name is V. In my opinion, V represents the arguments between the government and the citizens of London. He presents a means to an end argument in his speech. In V’s speech, he comes across as understanding, candid, earnest, accusatory, and confident. Throughout his speech, he tries to make citizens of London realizes what’s going on in their own country. Many are oblivious to what the government is doing. The people who do realize are upset about it and just pout about it. However at the end of the speech, after he got the attention of everyone, he offered an idea or solution to fix it.

V blew up the Old Bailey showing the ethos of the situation. He is being superior to the government. V understands that the people didn’t do anything showing logos, because the High Chancellor Adam Sutler promised things to them that have gotten way out of control. V took control using ethos trying to catch the citizens of London’s attention. V’s convincing speech could be considered as evaluation and forensic if you look at what he says in parts. He blames the Chancellor but mostly the citizens of London. They let things get this bad. The people also are having a hard time deciding whether it is the right or wrong to go against their own people.

The fine line between safety and freedom depends solely on the people of the country. You can always depend on it. If something happens that makes people feel unsafe like the activities of 9-11, you can bet there will be some change.

1 comments:

Mr. Hughes said...

P1:
--intro does not mention the text you plan to analyze; make sure that you not only establish a context but that you also immediately connect that context to the text you are analyzing

P2:
--the word "on" impedes flow
--do not use the phrase "in my opinion"; your audience already knows that this is your opinion
--the phrase "means to an end argument" is rigid
--this para. does not center around a central idea; it's not very cohesive; try focusing on one specific element in each para.

P3:
--how does blowing up a building "show the ethos of the situation?" connect and develop your ideas
--the phrasing in the 2nd sentence is awkward
--avoid the words "you" and "your"
--you write, "you look at what he says"; bear in mind that this is an impossible task, for we cannot LOOK at what anyone SAYS; rephrase

FINAL THOUGHTS: work on making solid connections and avoiding rigidity in your writing. your discussion of 9/11 did not fit your analysis because you did not connect it to V's speech. be sure to connect and spell out what you're attempting to say; your audience may not make the connection unless you make it for them